...This is quite possibly a snapshot of your brain...
I know it is the look you are going for so there isn't an easy fix on this,but the saturation is what is throwing it off for me. The background and foreground are too similar in saturation and intensity as well as the characters. I like this better though, so keep on going.
Awesome! That really makes sense now. It has the depth it was missing and the complexity that you deliver on the good ones... vague,lame.... I like you piece.